Third Revision

After our second submission to the class, we got very interesting commentary to improve on in our final submission.   We found out we needed to have a clear protagonist because our surplus amount of characters and little scenes made it more confusing to the audience.  With additional dialogue and a clear plot our extract should make more sense. This was fixed through our new vice over which explained the clear antagonist which was technology and the static gaze caused by it.  The problems we faced with our extract were similar to the feedback received from our first submission, "Glitch".  Glitch was confusing due to the fact that our dialogue wasn't sufficient and our shots that we filmed were confusing to the audience and plot.  Thus we decided to re film, A Static Gaze which was supposed to fix the confusing element and add a more evil element to technology.  However, we need more dialogue in order to create a clear story line. In our final submission, we will re film shots and dialogue in order to have a clear story line that the audience can conceptualize.